Friday, April 30, 2010

Writing Post-Mortem: My first YA book - The Red Crossroads

"It's alive!" *cough* *cough* "Well, it looks alive anyway." *pokes with stick*

Like Frankenstein, I have gathered together the pieces and now I'm rearranging them into the perfect beast. My young adult steampunk is heading toward the finish line and I wanted to talk about the process of creating the book. For those that are new to the steampunk genre, its a sub-genre of science fiction and speculative fiction.

The idea for this book popped up in my head last summer while at a conference in Washington D.C. Since that point I chewed on the idea and worked out the synopsis. Over the months I took notes and eventually I jumped into the pool to write the book. I can't believe its done! =)

Here is the short description for THE RED CROSSROADS:
Most seventeen year-old girls don’t have to decide between rescuing the world and saving a dying brother. For Fiona Jacobs, the post-industrial society where she lives is a world of survivors and red dust drifting through the low lying mountains from the deserts to the east. After her parents passed away, she was left alone to support her older brother, Alvin Jacobs, as he lives out her dream of attending medical school.

Highly intelligent, she has learned her father’s craft of bioengineering and has spent her teen years maintaining the machinery her father implanted within Alvin. Even with all her hard work, she discovers Alvin's heart is failing and she must find a way to replace it with a mechanical one. Circumstances thrust Fiona before a dictator who is searching for a set of plans to fix an ancient weapon. Plans which could be adapted to help her brother. After Fiona escapes from the dictator's clutches, she falls into a life and death race where she must discover the key to saving her brother and the world at the same time.
Post-Mortem: First of all, I have to say writing young adult is not easy. My crit partner, Sarah Bromley, hit me over the head a few times with her YA-stick. I still have the bruises, but the lessons have actually helped me see young adult books in a different light. I've read YA before and I've critiqued it for over a year now. But its not the same as going into your own story line and developing a young adult character. Transitioning from writing adult to writing YA is not as simple as it sounds. The "what would I do if I was a child prodigy with engineering and medical skills" mantra kept going off in my head while I wrote this book. (It didn't hurt to watch a few episodes of Doogie Howser either. Flashback coming...) Its not the same as approaching my previous characters who have attended college and have had relationships. They have to deal with taxes, mortgages, and jobs. They have baggage. And well, my YA heroine has a different kind of baggage based on her childhood and I had to get into that mindset. Its a bit of a jump, but not impossible.

Writing this book was so much fun! I normally write contemporary books with a paranormal twist. For this one I got to tap into my inner ubergeek and go nuts with it. All my teenage years of reading Harry Harrison's WEST OF EDEN and Octavia Butler's sci-fi books influenced how I tapped into the genre. Of course I read classic steampunk titles as well as new ones. (right now I'm reading MONSTER BLOOD TATTOO by DM Cornish. The premise is so good!) But all in all, I really got to go beyond my previous manuscripts expand my world building to a bigger scale. Much much bigger. I could let my imagination go wild and create laws and norms for different societies.

The historical aspects were fun as well. Not only did I finish my first young adult, but technically I finished my first book with historical elements (Victoriana). I spent hours researching the clothes, the modes of transportation, and even the food they ate. (Watch this great video from The Supersizers Go Victorian. So funny, yet unappetizing in some parts.)

Now the final hurdle, where I had to figure out the engineering and medical concepts. In my book Fiona does surgical procedures. We're not talking about patching up paper cuts here. She actually goes in with scalpels. Thanks to my hubby who is a doctor, I made sure my scenes were up to muster. Then I had to take my ideas and bring them together in the subject of bioengineering. How would machinery work in the body? (How do I expand this within the context of a steampunk world?) I had to chew on and visualize the concepts in order to add them into my story. This wasn't as easy as it sounds. I was concerned I went too technical, but in the end I learned my descriptions were easy to understand. Whew! (Lesson learned: Just write the book and let your crit partners or betas let you know if your flux capacitor is too over their heads. I don't have a flux capacitor but you get the point.)

Lesson I learned:
  1. Create a timeline! If you have events from the past that you reference in the future a timeline helps so much.
  2. Write out the major events in the back story for reference. I wrote about five pages of backstory that will never be seen in the story. But they helped me get the story line right and I knew when to push in those tidbits. And who knows, maybe the story can carry on in another book. =)
  3. Work out the technical aspects early if you can. Of course there are folks who write by the seat of their pants and I tend to do that with world building, but the technical aspects take time to chew on so if they are mapped out early there will be less pain in editing.
  4. Let your imagination go wild. This is an easy one, but there's nothing like going through those what-if exercises in your head. How can I make this scene bigger in scale? Have I gone far enough in terms of how this society works? Whip out the pencil and paper and draw some pictures. You'd be surprised how visualizing concepts helps you write them.
I highly encourage others to write outside of their comfort zone. This is my first young adult manuscript. I've written fantasy before, but this is not the same with so many elements combined together. I've learned so much from writing this book and hope it gets a chance to run out in the wild.

Monday, April 19, 2010

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Here is the sixth part of my series which I started several months ago. I normally don't write about vampires, but the madness at Harlow's family fun center continues. If you would like to read Part I, Part II , Part III, Part IV, and Part V they are available as other Excerpt Monday postings. We're closing in on Laney heading back to work...


FUN AT FIRST BITE - PART VI

For the third time I chickened out from calling my boss to tell him I wasn't coming to work on Monday. Most folks spent their Sundays relaxing or preparing for the work week by scoping out the men folding their undies at the local laundromat. I spent the day planning how the hell I'd avoid vamps during my work day.

I also had questions galore for Chauncey Harlow. Most of the questions for my boss ranged from the obvious to the creepy. Why was the safe in the office left empty? How did he throw away an enchanted necklace capable of commanding vampires like zombies? Perhaps I should toss in the more adventurous one, "Do you dance in the moonlight with fairies? 'Cause only supernatural folks carry around this kind of stuff?"

Over the months of my employment as shift manager, I'd asked the owner of Harlow's Family Fun Center much deeper questions based on the strange behaviors of the teens on the staff, but my current request bordered on playing with the straps of my comfy new straight jacket.

The cursed jewelry hung around my neck like a noose, heavy and foreboding. I wasted an entire day on the Internet consulting the all-knowing seer called Google. I didn't dig up much though. What a waste of what little time I had to spare today. My silver necklace had the description of every piece of crap Ebay offered. A few listings even had a tear drop shaped holder missing its gem or a broken clasp. Of course I stretched things a bit in my last diatribe, but in essence I didn't have what looked like anything special.

As I tugged at the silver, I pondered on which tools in the house might get it off. Chisels and hacksaws came to mind, but due to the proximity of my jugular vein I vetoed the idea. By the time the sun set, I wished I had a way to contact Edgar. I shouldn't have shooed him out so quickly.

By morning, I didn't have any clean clothes for the week, but at least I woke up determine to pretend I'd have a normal day. But as I sat in front of the mirror applying my makeup, I knew I was screwed. I draped five different hokey scarves in enough formations to resemble a life preserver. I still had the necklace on and the damn thing wasn't budging.

Edgar had warned me Saturday night not to come to work on Monday. Over and over again my mind worked over how with a few simple words I forced him to leave my home. A freakin' vampire under my control For a second there, the idea was more than tempting. I flashed a toothy grin from the memory. When Edgar showed up a few nights ago with his rain-soaked shirt clinging to his chest, I was perfectly ready to re-enact any Kama sutra positions that came to mind. And those eyes made my body sizzle like butter on frying pan.

Once done with my morning ritual, I decided to stop believing in nonsense and go earn a paycheck. Even though I kept repeating those words to myself I still shoved a small bulb of garlic into my bra. I didn't give a damn if it reeked and I looked like I had a third boob.

I crept out of my apartment and peered into the hallway. Not that I expected a blood-sucking vampire to be camping outside my door, but who knows? The hallway was empty. No passed out drunken college kids or even the morning paper. Maybe I'd psyched myself up for a big disappointment when I drove to work and nothing happened. Perhaps nothing would happen since it was daylight out and I had the afternoon to evening shift.

By the time I reached the main office, I couldn't resist grinning. Edgar had frightened me for nothing. I made it into work without some great vampire uprising occurring. When I strolled inside only a few customers whizzed about. During the day we catered to families with younger kids, so I settled into the office to handle managerial duties in silence. The afternoon went faster than I planned. Other than an emergency with a backed up toilet, I managed to avoid any vampire sightings.

Of course my sanctuary didn't stay quiet for long.

"What the hell is that smell?"

My head snapped up to see Edgar no more than two feet away. The sharp intake of breath didn't prevent my heart from skittering. He leaned in close and wrinkled his nose.

I pursed my lips. Garlic warded off vampires, but not in the manner I wanted.

"How did you get in here?"

"I opened the door and walked in."

He sauntered to the other side of the desk. My eyes wandered to take in the snug fit of his black uniform. A belt around his lean waist held pepper spray, a walkie-talkie, and a menacing \club. Chauncey had moved fast and now Edgar DeMille was our newest security guard.

I stammered, "When most people enter into a room, they’re heard."

"I am not like most men."

From my memories of the first night when we met and he used a robber like a blood popsicle, I would agree on that one. Blue eyes bore a hole into me while I pretended to rifle through job applications. While I went through an application scrawled with a bright red pen, he continued to stand there.

I glanced up. "Don't you have a job to do?"

"I'm doing it," was all he said.

I rolled my eyes. He could stand there all evening for all I cared. "You do that. I have to make my rounds."

Edgar stepped into my path. "You don't want to go out there."

This had to be good. "I haven't seen a single vampire all day. Ok, other than you. Are you saying every vampire in the area wants to play Whack-a-Mole?"

I wanted to return his stare and convince him that he didn't intimidate me. Even though he towered over me with a face chiseled in fine marble, I didn't falter. If he pressed hard enough I wasn't afraid to use my trump card. The necklace.

His eyes went to my neckline as if he'd read my mind. Like a silky caress, his gaze went from my lips down my neck. My hands reached for the necklace and touched the smooth silver.

He crossed his arms and widened his stance. "Laney, trust me on this one. You don't want to head in there."

I stepped around him and opened the door. I tried to take it all in, but I couldn’t prevent my mouth from dropping as my stomach turned sour. A huge party of pale faces, shining bright with smiles, surrounded a table with balloons. Another damn vampire birthday party.



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Friday, April 16, 2010

My Book List - 2010 - For my sanity...

Last year I was too busy writing to read a lot of books. And that's a shame. But this year I plan to head of out the gate running! My goal is to read 50 or more books this year. Which actually isn't hard since I can read a good book under three days. I will only list a book here if I get it done. With kids and a personal life I don't have time for a snoozefest. I plan to keep coming back to update this list as the year goes on to keep myself motivated.

There are a few books which I started and plan to come back to so who knows what this year will bring. So here's my progress of completed books so far:

  1. Life as We Knew It - Susan Beth Pfeffer (Jan)
  2. Turning Japanese - Cathy Yardley (Feb)
  3. The Maze Runner - James Dashner (April)
  4. The Dead and Gone - Susan Beth Pfeffer (April)
  5. Wake - Lisa McMann (April)
  6. This World We Live In - Susan Beth Pfeffer (April - So good - Read in 4 Hours)
  7. The Jigsaw Man - Gord Rollo (April)
  8. The Hunger Games - Suzanne Collins (April)
  9. Fade - Lisa McMann (May)
  10. Catching Fire - Suzanne Collins (May)
  11. Gone - Michael Grant (May)
  12. Hunger - Michael Grant (May)
  13. Silver Borne - Patricia Briggs (June)
  14. Lies - Michael Grant (June)
  15. Dirty Little Secrets - C.J. Omololu (June)
  16. Dead in the Family - Charlaine Harris (June 6-20)
  17. Midwife of Blue Ridge - Christine Blevins (July 7-10)
  18. Wings - Aprilynne Pike (August 8-11)
  19. Dream Called Time - S.L. Viehl (August 8-25)
  20. The Chosen One - Carol Lynch Williams (August 8-30)
  21. Poison Study - Maria V. Snyder (October 10-15)
  22. His Hired Baby - Jacqueline Diamond (November 11-30)
  23. Spellbent - Lucy A. Snyder (December 12-10)
  24. Forgotten - Melody Carlson (December 12-15)
  25. Shotgun Sorceress - Lucy A. Snyder (December 12-27)

Thursday, April 8, 2010

Hello Chicka-dee! The Joys of Paranormal Chick Lit

Right now, I'm in the middle of working on a project that couldn't be classified as chick lit, but as far as the genre is concerned, I love it. Yes, people say chick lit is dead, but in my opinion sometimes a girl needs to sit back and follow someone on their journey and laugh at their life. There's just something about following a woman, or it could be a man as well, and seeing yourself in them and what they go through. In terms of chick lit and women's fiction, I believe one is a sub-genre of the other. Women's fiction includes chick lit as well as mainstream women's literature. For me, I prefer a quirky, snippy voice. No offense against Jane Austen, but either some Prada shoes or hilarious angst makes my day!

I love to write fantasy/paranormal chick lit! It's like a warm fluzzy blanket where I go deep into my character's head and I follow them around as they face the main conflict in the book. My first paranormal chick lit was Enchanted, Inc. I just loved the main character! Before her job at Enchanted, Inc her job sucked. I could related to her experiences with her horrible boss. But then the author took it a step further and gave into my cravings for the fantastical--she placed Katie Chandler at a company where magic is manufactured as a product and sold. Another book I enjoyed was A Girl's Guide to Witchcraft. So funny! I'm not looking for drama or a full out War and Peace, I just want to curl up and experience Jane Madison's drama. I want to laugh and cry, but most of all I want to have fun.

Other books on my TBR list (even some YA in there):

  • Confessions of a Werewolf Supermodel - Ronda Thompson
  • How Not to Make a Wish - Mindy Klasky
  • Undead and Unwed - MaryJanice Davidson
  • Carpe Demon: Adventures of a Demon-Hunting Soccer Mom - Julie Kenner (Need to finish this one! Great paranormal mommy chick lit!)


  • You Had me at Halo - Amanda Ashby
  • You are so Undead to Me - Stacey Jay
  • Oh. My. Gods. Tera Lynn Childs
  • Spells and Sleeping Bags - Sarah Mlynowski
  • The Salem Witch Tryouts - Kelly McClymer

In terms of writing, completing a paranormal chick lit isn't easy. For me, I love to push the envelope. What is the worse thing I can do this person? Can I take it a step further? I have a character already created for the next one and she won't shut up. I plan to take her from the normal life she's always known and turn things topsy-turvy by doing the worse thing possible. *evil laugh here*

Do you have any favorite fantasy/paranormal chick lit books? I'm open to suggestions! Especially young adults ones I may not know about.

Monday, April 5, 2010

Great Book - The Maze Runner by James Dashner

Last week I finished a great book which I devoured: James Dashner's The Maze Runner. The story revolves around Thomas, a teen who wakes up in an elevator with any memories of his past life. Once he reaches the top elevator his new life starts in the Glade, a place that is surrounded by a dangerous maze. The Gladers, or the teens who live in the Glade have those amongst them that are called Runners. The Runners search the maze for an escape from their current lives. Thomas arrives with a series of other strange happenings that signal the end of the Gladers existence in the Glade and a final battle to escape the nasty creatures that lurk in the maze.

This is my kind of book. The whole time I read it I kept wondering about what would happen next. This drove me to move the next page and the next. The pacing is great and Dashner did a fabulous job of holding back just enough to make me curious about what would come next. (Ok, not curious, a bit crazy.) I read it quickly and highly recommend it to others. By the time I reached the end, I was kinda sad since I'd have to wait a while to read the next one. =)

Thursday, April 1, 2010

April Fool's Day and Why April will Rock!

Well, first of all Happy April Fool's day! Personally, I hate days like today. Why? Cause I'm gullible as hell. You know that friend you always had in school who believed everything you said--no matter how crazy it was? That's me! My hubby takes advantage of my gullibility at every chance possible. So a note to my friends, no matter how funny the joke is, I'm not laughing. Well, not at first anyway.

In other news, I'm closing in on the finish line of my steampunk. The journey has been so much fun! I had every opportunity to geek out on every page with steampunk yumminess. *Heavenly sigh* This is my first young adult book and so far its been a blast!

I've also fallen into a great book called The Maze Runner by James Dasher. So good. My TBR pile is a mile high, but I keep coming back to it again and again. I'm not even half way and I want to know what's coming next! So many great books to read. I can't wait to settle into editing and reading books out of the pile. My agent, Jim McCarthy, posted on the Dystel and Goderich blog about John Warner, one of the commentators for The Tournament of Books, who offered up a service. If you listed the last five books you had read, he would tell you what you should read next. So Jim did the same. I posted my last five books that I completed (meaning read from beginning to end - cause I have a few I never finished).

Jim wrote, "Shawntelle, I say what I said to some other folks before: this is harder when you know the person! So I'm gonna go out on a limb with my suggestion for you. Less outwardly fantastical than most of the titles you mention, but something about it feels right: Out by Natsuo Kirino."

Hmmm, I've never heard of this author before. She has a few titles at my library, but not the book in question so I'll order it online. I'll have to let you know if its any good. I can't wait to read it.